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What you have given me by ~pardzs:iconpardzs:



My palms bleed from this rose you gave me
I couldn’t feel the pain for I am mesmerized by its beauty
I held it tight, not wanting to let go
You’ll soon see this blood stains and soon you will save me

But decades passed,
Hundred times you walked by,
Million times, I’ve cried for you.
But not once did you stayed and look through
This blood is wasted, dried up beneath my feet
These thorns stayed hidden within my grip
Every second of the clock, they sting, they hurt
My eyes are restless, but tears are translucent
I cried and cried but not a single sympathy

You gave me a rose, asked me to appreciate it
But now it burns from this glare I’m giving
From red to grey… ashes are all that is left
They burned me as well, I never did let go
Nothing is left of me
Because of this rose you’ve given me
©2006-2009 ~pardzs
:iconpardzs:

Author's Comments

I've witnessed a lot of heartbreaks
I've heard a lot of bitterness
I felt a lot of anger and
I've swept a lot of tears
"Everything will be alright"

Maybe a lot of women (or maybe men) went through with the idea of the poetry.
"We have different plot but we have the same fate" -Jan Santiago

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:icongutterbreed:
small crit:
"these blood is wasted"
perhaps that should be "this blood is wasted?"

but you have a very vivid imagery, and it brings a lot of passion to this piece. good job.

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Automatons gather all the pieces so the world may be increased
In simulation jubilation for the builders of the body of the beast
:iconthorn4everyheart:
san to galing ??galing tlga.galing mo po gumwa!
:icondesmondcross:
OMG nice... makes me wana go take a pen go poetry again haha.. very nice :D
:iconpardzs:
Wow! you're into poetry too!? 'again'? can I read some of your works!?!

thanks :D

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Who are you to tell me who I am?!
:iconpardzs:
uhmm... nainspired ako eh... I think I've heard too much heart-breaking stories, enough to write me this one.

thanks kuya! wahahaha. :D

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Who are you to tell me who I am?!
:iconpardzs:
oh? hehehe :blush: i'll change it right away... :giggle:

thanks for the critique and comment. :D

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Who are you to tell me who I am?!
:iconxjou-chanx:
wow galing naman ni ate! :hug: :eyes: galing talaga! very talented :eyes:
at tsaka ang bait pa at ang ganda grabe! kung lalake ka lng siguro nililigawan na kita! umm...did i say that? was it correct? wait lemme rephrase....kung lalake lang ako...siguro nililigawan na kita kahit layo ng gap natin :eyes:

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I SHALL REGAIN MY CHOCO BAR!! ROAR!! \(ToT)/
:iconpardzs:
:rofl: Wahahahahaha. Binola mo nanaman ang ate mo!
woi! ATE mo ko!! you can't do that!! hehehehe, joking :giggle:

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Who are you to tell me who I am?!
:iconweirdzz:
:omg:

same as always lovely piece...

love the whole metaphor..

hay... love... crazy thing callled love...

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:boogie: shake your hips and hope for the best --> [link] :boogie:

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